Jasmine Hart

These are really great. They flow nicely and I love your use of language. You create very powerful imagery. I love; "because who honestly wants to eat nicotine for dessert" ...

I.a: This is beautiful. I love your use of colour and it flows perfectly. 2a: I like the compression of this into one stanza but I'm not sure you need ...

3. Sometimes Salmon I'll tell you this through story and the you's not always you. Please hear me. This is my only way to speak: Sometimes I am lying on ...

Re-Recorded: This is wonderful (as usual). It flows perfectly and your imagery is unique and gripping. I love the structure. I especially enjoyed "Dancing just means limping around, snarling in ...

Poem One: This is so beautiful. Your imagery is wonderful and unusual and it flows perfectly. I especially enjoyed the last line. Poem Two: "where the ellipses elapse and commas ...

Forgive me...I'm sorely out of practice. 2) Tea I am drinking green tea now, cups and cups, (reasons forthcoming). And regular tea. B makes it for me when I go ...

1) Reintroduction *submitting*

April is the worst month for me for deadlines...but I am an addict...(who hasn't written in months.)

Write every day. Anything - musings, poetry, fiction, collections of quotes feebly strung together, whatever. Just words on paper. Going to start slow since it's been a while and hopefully ...

Hi, I really enjoyed the opening and this progresses nicely. I like the use of the quote before the poem. The first stanza is vivid and the emotion comes across ...

Hi, Welcome to YWS! I hope you like it here. This is lovely. The title immediately drew me in and your choice of subject matter was original. It flows well ...

Clau! So good to read you again! As always, I really enjoyed this. Beautiful. I love the tone, especially in the last stanza, which was to my mind absolutely perfect. ...

Hi, You have some lovely images here. The opening question instantly drew me in. I'd change "never shattered" because I don't think "shattered" and "petals" work together without further explanation ...

Hi, I really enjoyed this. The opening lines instantly drew me in and the whole thing flows very nicely. I like "lines, lines, lines." I also like how "lies, lies, ...

Hi, I like your use of couplets here and you expand nicely on your theme. I like "obstacles rage" - it's very original. I think the rhyme hems you in ...